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VickiL /
CGAChunkFeedbackFromRachelVicki - I chose to give feedback on the first part of your genre data section, after the list of different genres used in the daycare. For the most part, I think you are doing a good job here. In the first paragraph, the thing that really stands out as needing some expansion is that you bring up how there may be more than one author for the permission slips, but you don't talk about why. Other than that, maybe cleaning up the writing a bit (different word choice, etc.) I think you're doing well. Is another reason they're typed on the computer because it's neater and easier to read? This would be a big one in my opinion, so maybe you could include that as well. For the most part, the rest of the section seems good. Again, I'd clean up the writing/word choices and just give it a once over edit. |